This is the weekend when all across the world, we remember those people who fought in the many wars since the First World War. On November 11th at 11 0’clock in 1918 the armistice was signed, ending the Great War. Sadly, it was not the war to end all wars as people thought so on Remembrance Day we think about all those who have been caught up in conflict since that first armistice.
To remember this, the prompt this week is RED You can interpret it in any way you like. I look forward to your posts.
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Liliah
11/12/2019 08:43:44 am
The Diary
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Mr. Tomkins
11/12/2019 04:19:56 pm
Wow - what a powerful start Liliah! Before the homework has been set too - superb!
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George
11/13/2019 03:49:38 pm
The colour of the thick red blood makes me sick to my core, but yet I am determined to win this war.
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Mr. Tomkins
11/17/2019 04:54:39 pm
This writing is superb George - really engaging. Well done.
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Patricia
11/13/2019 03:50:05 pm
Harold was an old man and he was a photographer. He decided to camp in the night in the forest and taking pictures of nocturnal animals. However when night came, something rather peculiar happened .
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Mr. Tomkins
11/17/2019 04:55:52 pm
Well written Patricia - I like the dialogue efforts.
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Mackenzie
11/13/2019 04:09:53 pm
It was late Saturday afternoon as rain bucketed down outside while James and his brother Eric were playing a game of monopoly. James landed on one of Eric's hotels."500 pounds please, "demanded Eric. James handed over one of his big read note that represented 500 pounds. Eric gave a sinister look over at James as if he were saying you've got know chance of winning now. When Eric was looking outside admiring a colorful rainbow James quickly stole the 500 note back off Eric and slid it under his side. Eric then turned around to realise his note had gone missing and shouted.
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Mr. Tomkins
11/17/2019 04:56:48 pm
Good story Mac. Try to play with shorter sentences for greater effect on the final reader.
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Aiden
11/13/2019 04:50:23 pm
“Hey, Jim come over here I’ve got something bad. And you may want to bring a cloth or something, I might need to have some medical attention, call the ambulance I’m badly hurt.” Jim walked around the corner and saw me crumpled up sitting on the grass by washing line in a heap of blood. A bit of metal was sticking out of my thigh. I suddenly yelled I need to pee. So he said I’ll give you some privacy so we went around the corner. It came out in the form of an unusual colour it was RED.
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Mr. Tomkins
11/17/2019 04:59:27 pm
A slightly unusual approach to the task! Try and think about making the reader engage emotionally in your writing.
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Joe
11/13/2019 05:05:07 pm
Red.All that the soldier could see was red ,the colour of blood .The shrieking of the victims penetrated his ears.As he ran on further on . A mine blew up in front of him it sent him flying through the air he landed and held his leg in agony he looked back with hesitance .His vision went blurry from the sweat dripping of his forehead into his eyes. But he was determined to win the war
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Mr. Tomkins
11/17/2019 05:00:34 pm
Your vocabulary choices are superb and this is a strong piece of writing Joe. Try to look over for punctuation with each piece of writing you do.
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Oscar
11/13/2019 05:10:52 pm
The rain bucketed down outside while James and his brother Eric were playing a game of Monopoly. James then landed on one of Eric’s hotels. “Five hundred dollars please,” Eric demanded. James handed over the big red note that read five hundred dollars. Eric snatched it out of James’s hand and tucked it away under his side of the board. When Eric was looking outside admiring a colourful rainbow that had formed James had stolen back the five hundred dollar note “but where did it go?” Eric shouted as he had saw it had disappeared.
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Mr. Tomkins
11/17/2019 05:19:59 pm
Well done Oscar. Try to break the writing into paragraphs so it is easier to read.
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Adam
11/13/2019 06:11:12 pm
In a weird dream , Adam dreamed that everything was red in his dream there was a red sandwich a red banana and a red turtle ! He made a wizard and the wizard said expeliarmous and all the dream world was really true in is dream . He woke up to do his chores and he was a red world his dream came true!
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Mr. Tomkins
11/17/2019 05:20:55 pm
It is a weird dream! Remember to use speech marks for dialogue Adam. Good attempt.
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Flora
11/13/2019 07:16:37 pm
It was another boring day in class and, Mr Durrant was droning on and on about how to turn fractions into decimals. He moved to the other side of the class near Milly.
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Mr. Tomkins
11/17/2019 05:23:57 pm
This made me chuckle Flora! Well written!
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Mattie
11/14/2019 03:57:21 pm
Once there was a young girl called Cristal who always liked to ask questions. One day she asked her best friend (Liz)”what is your favourite colour?”and Liz said “aaahhh that’s tricky i absolutely hate red so I would probably go for yellow .” “Yellow? I hate yellow mine is red!”
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Mr. Tomkins
11/17/2019 05:24:43 pm
Oh dear! Poor Liz! Remember a new paragraph for different speakers.
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Milo
11/14/2019 04:46:17 pm
One day in Upton upon severn there once lived a boy called Jeffery. Jeffery didn’t go out side often, so when he did he was shocked when he saw every one was wearing bright red Poppies , and that was when he remembered it was remembrance day. Then he figured out that every one went to the Upton rugby field where they had been growing trillions of Poppies and every one gathered around them and had a two minute silence to remember all of those who gave up there lives for our freedom and our future .
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Mr. Tomkins
11/17/2019 05:25:37 pm
A nice community message in here Milo. Remember to check over for punctuation - your final sentence is very long.
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Ruby
11/14/2019 07:33:01 pm
Hope
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Mr. Tomkins
11/17/2019 05:26:38 pm
Beautifully written Ruby - really impressed with the maturity of the writing. Well done.
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Poppy
11/15/2019 10:30:30 am
As he was walking across the grey narrow pavement he had noticed a man wearing a yellow top and a red hat walk into an abandoned building. Joey had seen the man the other day wearing the exact same clothing going in to the same building. So this time Joey decided to follow him into the bank as he was being very suspicious... Oh my gosh it was horrifying. The sight of it burned Joey's eyes.
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Mr. Tomkins
11/17/2019 05:27:42 pm
Good work Poppy! Some strong vocabulary choices in here. I wonder what he saw!
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Daisy
11/15/2019 11:43:10 am
The cries people in pain deafened me. As i looked around red thick blood was everywhere. It made me feel sick right through me. Although, this is traumatizing
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Mr. Tomkins
11/17/2019 05:30:15 pm
A nice message of bravery in this writing Daisy. Well done. Remember an 'i' on its own is always capitalised. :-)
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Emma
11/16/2019 08:19:23 am
The war
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Mr. Tomkins
11/17/2019 05:31:08 pm
Nice work Emma. Think about paragraphing your writing to break it into more clear sections. Well done.
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joshua
11/17/2019 12:52:41 pm
Red, Orange, Yellow, Green, Blue, Pink, Purple, Brown, Gold, and Turquoise are colours, Black, Grey and White are shades. Red is a primary colour it doesn't need to be mixed to make it, Fire, anger, strangling, roses, poppies and cheek colour. Orange has a fruit named after it it is created with red and yellow. Yellow is also a primary colour it is the colour of joy, the sun, sand, daffodiles and buttercups. Green is the colour that represents nature. it is made with yellow and blue. Blue is a primary colour it is the colour of sadness and water. their is loads of other collours but this is a 100wc not a 300wc.
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Mr. Tomkins
11/17/2019 05:32:13 pm
Colours have huge impacts on people's emotions! Interesting take on this week's challenge Josh! Well done.
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