We have 5 words for you this week. They all have to be included in your writing but can be in any order. They are:
Bicycle Desperate Yellow Warned Greedily Post your writing here and I will publish them on the 100wc.net website where they can be read by people all over the world.
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Adam
9/25/2019 03:56:35 pm
Dave was in a yellow top and was riding hiss bicycle by the shiny , glittery river ( it was called the river severn.) Meanwhile, a police man warned Dave not to go in the river , so instead he went to the co-op. In co-op Dave greedily bought all the sweets but on the way back to his house Dave desperarly needed the toliet , so he rushed back and gone to the toilet , Dave suddenly thought it was from the food he had . Later in the day , Dave found his (best looking) friend Ben , they played on their super speedy , top class scooters for hours .
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Mr. Tomkins
9/25/2019 07:59:00 pm
Nice piece of writing! Your vocabulary choice is good - remember River Severn is a proper noun. Well done.
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Adam
9/26/2019 04:21:04 pm
thanks for the feedback Mr.Tomkins!
Charlie
9/25/2019 04:24:23 pm
Charlie rode a yellow bicycle to school everyday in a desperate attempt to be friends with all the cool people in his school. As it wasn't working, Charlie greedily stole some money from his mum's purse to buy a scooter. All of the cool people at school had scooters. Although, his father always warned him that they,re complete and total rubbish. But he ignored his father's warnings and bought himself a scooter. So out of spite, Charlie then became friends with the cool people in his school just because of a scooter
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Mr. Tomkins
9/25/2019 08:01:01 pm
Well written Charlie - is it good he became friends with the 'cool' gang because of a scooter? Hopefully not!
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Mackenzie
9/25/2019 04:44:17 pm
Mark, who was quite a despicable person, noticed out of the corner of his eye his dream bicycle. It was yellow with a red stripe across it.He was desperate and ran over to the seller like an Olympic sprinter going for gold.He bought it straight away, ignoring the seller trying to warn him, and rode home.When he arrived his infant baby brother tried to get on it, as quick as a flash he dragged him off it and said “Go away it’s mine! With a loud bang the bike transformed into a figure and was no longer a bike anymore...
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Mr. Tomkins
9/25/2019 08:02:30 pm
There is some great literary devices here Mack! Well done! I love the simile and some of your vocabulary choices too!
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Adam
9/26/2019 04:23:26 pm
Mackenzie your storie is good i like the similie well done !
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Oscar
9/25/2019 04:59:22 pm
At the end of the road there is a small yellow shop which had loads of delicious sweets.I was desperate to try the new chocolate bar flavour that had just came out ,so i decided to ride there on my bicycle to get there quicker.When i got there i was warned that it was very sweet , but i bought it anyway.Whilst i was riding home i greedily devoured the chocolate bar so that i wouldn’t have to share it with my annoying sister who always made me share stuff with her.
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Mr. Tomkins
9/25/2019 08:03:44 pm
Nice piece of writing Oscar! I particularly like 'devoured'! You build up a nice short story well...keep it up!
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Ruby
9/25/2019 07:24:29 pm
Florence was a mischievous girl. One day, she rode her bicycle to the sweet shop with her three friends. Once there, two of her friends were desperate for some yellow gobstoppers. They dared her to go in and steal as many as she could without getting caught. However, her other friend disagreed and warned her that she would get caught, but Florence didn't care! She walked into the shop and greedily scooped two pocketful's, and ran out, thinking she hadn't been caught. But did she get away with it...
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Mr. Tomkins
9/25/2019 08:04:48 pm
Nice idea to leave it on a cliff hanger with an ellipsis at the end Ruby! Well written. :-)
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Patricia
9/25/2019 07:55:27 pm
Amy was riding a bicycle. It was the color yellow. She was in a race and was desperate to win, she is very competitive. She went past the first contestant. She saw a sign that said 'short cut'. Amy stopped in her tracks and thought:
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Mr. Tomkins
9/25/2019 08:05:41 pm
Nice piece of writing Patricia. You built up the story well. Try to think about sentence openers next time! :-)
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Emily
9/25/2019 07:56:00 pm
On Monday, I went to a garage sale. There was a lot of interesting things but one thing caught my eye. A beautiful yellow bicycle I was desperate to get it, but the man warned me it was a waist of money because it would go rusty really quick. Anyway I didn't listen and I bought it for 26.50 pounds. The next day my best friend came over and said "can I ride your new bike?". But I said greedily, "No you cant because you might crash it."
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Mr. Tomkins
9/25/2019 08:07:30 pm
A very protective character, Emily! We will try to do some work on dashes soon as there are a couple of places you could put one - particularly after 'A beautiful yellow bicycle - ' Well done!
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Lily
9/25/2019 07:56:30 pm
On Wednesday, I went to Sports Direct and saw a lovely yellow bicycle I was desperate to buy it. But the man warned me not to because it gets very dirty , people come in and always say it is a waste of money . But i greedily wanted it , so i bought it . When I got home my best friend was there and he said can i have a go on your bike? But i said no because you might break it. He looked really upset , he ran home crying to his mum and dad . I felt so mean for not sharing with my best friend.
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Mr. Tomkins
9/25/2019 08:08:42 pm
Well written Lily. Try to focus on those sentence openers next time and remember an 'i' on its own is always a capital.
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Liliah?
9/26/2019 08:40:58 am
Gaby was a kid. A very short (and lonely) kid. Her parents weren't rich, in fact they were quite the opposite. Gaby's family would try to get nice stuff for her but she always warned them that she wouldn't use them. She honestly didnt want much, just a yellow bicycle. She was desperate. One day, when she was scavenging around a dustbin for something to eat, she found a magazine about bikes. She greedily flicked through the pages - forgetting her hunger. There it was, on sale for £5.70 the yellow bike! Gaby needed it so bad. "Mum - sale- go - now - bike!" She sputtered. "You know what?" said mum, looking at Dad, "go on then!" Gaby smiled.
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Mr. Tomkins
9/26/2019 05:25:38 pm
A good story and nice use of dashes Liliah! Well done!
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joshua
9/26/2019 03:55:11 pm
Leon was an amature bicycle rider. One race, he was put in the yellow team, he was desperate to win. His manager warned him that the other racers liked to bash other people out of the race. Leon gulped, his neighbours thought he was born with a bike helmet on, but he knew it was all lies. Every day, he was thoroughly trained by a coach. But before he could say no fouling. They were off he had a slow start on everyone else so he had to remember what his coach said and kept on trying. Soon, he caught up with the others they were all greedily racing for the win. Leon kept on peddling and found himself at 1st place, the finish was in sight, he peddled and peddled and he won!
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Mr. Tomkins
9/26/2019 05:26:37 pm
A great growth mindset piece Josh - I like the way you approached the task!
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Flora
9/26/2019 04:01:28 pm
Desperate for the loo, James cycled faster and faster on his new yellow bicycle. A few days ago, when he was buying this bike, the shopkeeper warned him that this was a very bad bike, yet he needed something better than his Scooby-doo tricycle now that he was in middle school. Halfway home, his bike broke down and he was forced to go to the loo in a nearby hedge. He spotted some blackberries and greedily scoffed down a whole load. Suddenly, round the corner he spotted a boy who he instantly recognised as Fred - the school bully…
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Mr. Tomkins
9/26/2019 05:28:19 pm
Oh no! That's not the place you want to break down! A nice engaging read Ruby. Well done.
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flora
9/26/2019 05:41:56 pm
I'm not Ruby I'm Flora.
Lili
9/26/2019 07:41:32 pm
F...........L.........o..........R..........A!
Mr. Tomkins
9/27/2019 09:00:20 pm
I'm sorry Flora - my mistake! I apologise!
Joe
9/26/2019 05:01:13 pm
Joe, whose birthday was today ,awoke with excitement. He had been desperate for a bright yellow bicycle .He had hardly slept at all,he sprung out of his bed like a spring.His mum had warned him not to come downstairs until daylight had broken.But he took no notice and had already bolted down the stair case like a lightning bolt ,and greedily ripped of the brightly coloured wrapping paper.To find his bicycle it looked astonishing and he couldn’t wait to try it out .so he took it outside and went to a hill and pushed off but he was picking up speed very fast …
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Mr. Tomkins
9/26/2019 05:30:00 pm
I really like the 'sprung out of bed like a spring' part of your writing Joe! Remember to proof read as I think a full stop might need moving? Nice writing though Joe!
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Mattie
9/26/2019 05:12:22 pm
When I was 5 I wanted a pink bike but people warned me not to get one . The next day, I was even more desperate to get a bike so I greedily stole my mums bike (she doesn’t use it) it was blue, purple and white I rode it to school, in the end I fell of into a tree (that hurt but it I’m all right now.) last week I was practising on my mums bike on a field full of sheep poop, I tried to go through all the sheep poop as possible. 4 months later it was my birthday and my parents got me a yellow bicycle and I loved it.
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Mr. Tomkins
9/26/2019 05:32:34 pm
I'm glad your character finally got the bike! :-) I like your use of brackets to add some parenthesis to your writing. Well done.
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Mattie
9/26/2019 06:11:36 pm
Thank you mr Tomkins.😁👍🏻
Mattie
9/27/2019 03:59:25 pm
Thank you 😊 for your feedback Mr Tomkins. Adam and Flora I like your story’s 👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻
Adam
9/28/2019 05:07:00 pm
thanks mattie
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Indiah
9/26/2019 05:28:22 pm
On my birthday I was desperate to get a yellow bycicle. So i greedily begged my parents to get me one. They warned me not ask them over and over again or they wont buy me one but i wouldnt listen. So i landed up not getting one but i did get a phone which i was very greatfull for. Now i have learnt my lesson to listen to my parents. The next day, at school everyone asked me what I got. I told
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Indiah
9/26/2019 05:29:17 pm
Im sorry my work was a little to long it was 144 words
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Mr. Tomkins
9/27/2019 09:02:07 pm
Well done Indiah - don't worry about too many words - it's all part of the challenge...you will get it right! Remember an 'i' on its own is always a capital.
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Emma
9/26/2019 06:39:54 pm
One sunny evening, Emma pleaded to her mum "Can I go to the wood. "
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Mr. Tomkins
9/27/2019 09:03:30 pm
Nice writing Emma! Imagine if the chocolates magicked your character to another world!
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Poppy
9/26/2019 08:50:48 pm
On Monday, it was Amilia's birthday she was really exited and was warned not to get to desperate and have a sneak peak at her presents. The next day Amilia went to school it was only Friday so it was three days until her special day. She had noticed her friends were being very suspicious and wanted to know what it was, so she went over to them and asked them what they were doing "Oh umm we're giving each other answers to homework" The rather dumb one of the group said. It was Monday, and Amilia jumped out of bed and got ready to open her first present. As it was her birthday she greedily opened her first present it was a yellow bicycle."Surprise!" Shouted all her friends in the kitchen "So that's what you were talking about" said Amilia.
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Mr. Tomkins
9/27/2019 09:06:20 pm
Nice surprise Poppy! Well written - remember to proof read your writing for punctuation. A nice first entry to the 100WC, well done!
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One day in space, there was a magic hat. The magical hat asked his friend Bob who was an alian, if he could have a bicycle ago on his bright yellow bicycle. Bob said no but the magical hat was desperate to have a go so he got on any way. Becareful shouted Bob you will fall off you haven't got any legs. Aww ouch that hurt, I did warmed you said Bob angrily that he had broken his bike. I am so sorry Bob I was accting verry greedily.......... What will happen next.
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Mr. Tomkins
9/27/2019 09:07:33 pm
I love the magic hat and alien - you have taken this in your own creative direction! Well done Chelsea. We will try to do some work with speech marks soon to show when your characters are talking!
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beth
10/3/2019 06:26:06 pm
nice name chels
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Chelsea
9/27/2019 08:07:39 am
One day in space, there was a magic hat. The magical hat asked his friend Bob (who is an alian), if he could have ago on his bright yellow bicycle. Bob said no but the magic hat was desperate to have ago so he got on any way. Becarful shouted Bob you will fall off you haven't got any legs. Aww...ouch that hurt, I did warned you said Bob angrily because that he had broken his bike. I am so sorry Bob I was accting verry greedily.....What will happen next?
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#love chelsea buns
9/30/2019 08:39:24 pm
i have 92 words in my work only needed 8 more super close Lol
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beth
9/27/2019 05:20:18 pm
I was desperate for a yellow bicycle. One day I was walking around town and found a yellow bike in a shop window. I so wanted it so I went and bought it. I was warned about it and rode it on the way home. The next day my friend Jack came over and took one look at my bike and asked if he could have a go .I looked at him sheepishly and said " no " in a greedily way. Then he asked me were I got it from so that he could buy one . I didn't really want to tell him but I told him anyway and he said "I'm off to buy a bike like yours and then I can play on it and bring it over to yours" he said and he really did buy one but never got warned.
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Mr. Tomkins
9/27/2019 09:10:24 pm
Good writing Beth, remember to check your homophones - I am wondering why your character was warned about the bike? Well done.
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beth
10/3/2019 06:24:06 pm
thanks for the feedback Mr.Tomkins
charlie
9/27/2019 06:21:20 pm
any still on the blog?
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Poppy
9/28/2019 08:04:44 pm
Yes
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beth
10/3/2019 06:28:01 pm
hi poppy
Aiden
9/27/2019 06:46:04 pm
The boy , who was called Joe, was desperate for a yellow bicycle but he didn’t mind if it was a bit worn out. So he asked his mum but his mum warned him to be careful on it if she buys it for him. He took his yellow bike out to show his best friends, one of his friends asked to have a go but joe greedily said “ no it’s my bike I’m not sharing!”. Joes friends weren’t very happy with happy with because Joe didn’t share his new yellow bicycle so nobody wanted to play with him .
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Mr. Tomkins
9/27/2019 09:12:13 pm
I like the story Aiden - you have a good message to share. Well written!
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Emma
9/27/2019 07:57:17 pm
Don’t worry if your busy but I sent my story a day ago and it has not been put up yet I was wondering if it didn’t send
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Mr. Tomkins
9/27/2019 09:12:45 pm
I've got it - sorry about the delay in getting it on here Emma! Have a lovely weekend. :-)
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Emma
9/27/2019 09:20:03 pm
Thank you 😊! Have a lovely weekend too Mr Tomkins
chelsea
9/27/2019 09:17:12 pm
have a lovely week end mr Tomkins
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Louis
9/28/2019 02:02:17 pm
I wrote 150 words in my story, is that to many to post. Also, do you write you story in the reply area?
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Mr. Tomkins
9/30/2019 04:37:11 pm
Hi Louis, yes you do write it in the reply area and 150 words might be ok...I certainly wouldn't go any longer. Usually they say 80-120 is ideal.
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Maisie Quinn#
9/29/2019 06:35:56 pm
Today was the day Matilda would finally discover who is the captain of the netball team. Everyone was rushing to school, and putting their bicycles in the lock up area. All of the pupils were always on time except for Matilda.She always had scruffy hair and her bag was falling of her shoulders.
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Mr. Tomkins
9/30/2019 04:38:39 pm
Well done Maisie - I feel you have taken real ownership over the direction of your writing and it works really nicely!
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Summer
9/29/2019 09:18:28 pm
A man one day went to the shop on his yellow bicycle . He was desperate for doughnuts so he greedily brought ten yellow doughnuts . Then the man carried on on his bicycle . A lady warned him that it was about to rain . So the man was desperate to get home before the rain he peddled hard and fast . But then the rain came down so fast the man couldn't see . So the man stopped his bicycle and got off. He put his hand in his yellow bag and pulled out his yellow umbrella . So he ran back as fast as he could with his yellow umbrella in one hand and his bicycle in his other hand and when he got back he greedily ate his ten yellow doughnuts .
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Mr. Tomkins
9/30/2019 04:39:55 pm
Well written Summer - to improve your writing further, really try to develop some exciting sentence openers to your work. Well done.
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chelsea
9/30/2019 06:47:06 pm
summ i read or story but it dosnt make sence and you dont have to use the word loads of times well done
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beth
10/17/2019 04:56:37 pm
Hi Chelsea you put summ I read or story shouldn't it be I read your story
chelsea
9/30/2019 06:49:43 pm
i loved reading it tho its amazing just dont make to much sence x
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Mattie
10/1/2019 05:37:40 pm
Summer I love 💗 your story!
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SUMMER
9/29/2019 09:38:27 pm
It's summer did you get my story
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chelsea bun xd
9/30/2019 08:36:38 pm
Mr Tomkins when does the words change on here i am intrestied because i wanna do my home work now or tomorrow because i love tipping and is y story online on the 100 WC yet i was wandering thanks bye see ya tomorrow hope you had or have a nice meal.
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Liliah
10/5/2019 09:27:45 am
Ends sat night
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Emma
10/5/2019 09:46:43 am
At 6am,Charlotte was working solid at Apollo nine .I can’t wait to see success she thought . A couple of weeks later , her rocket was done she went to the launch station but it just wouldn’t take off. She was flooded with anger she had spent many years working on apollo nine .A decade passed and now she was stood in front of the launch box of Apollo eleven would it work or not?The suspense filled their faces everything lied on this moment no one had made the moon before or successfully launched then came sucess
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Moon adventure by Joshua
10/5/2019 12:05:15 pm
Sam was an astronaught as eager to get to the moon as everyone else. He entered the space complex one day and asked the receptionist how to get to the moon, he answered "Well, you need to go up the stairs , take the monrail and leave from there." Desperate to go, Sam raced up the stairs and he saw Neil Armstrong's astronaught suit. After waiting, the monrail came and 2 other astronaughts jumped in eager to go. He sat in the last available space awaiting his dream the monrail came to the rocket building. They jumped off. Sam and the others took the elevator to where the cockpit was, he pressed a green button and a bridge extended across and there was a 3 seated rocket! They jumped in willingly when an hour passed the controls were ready but when Sam pressed the launch button it lit a fire below the rocket it wasn't working he said "What if we put our suits on?" He put the white armour on but when it just wouldn't take off, Sam saw the problem, they needed mission control to confirm their lift off so whithout a doubt, Sam jumped off the rocket. He went down the elevator, on to the monrail to the complex up the stairs and turned on the mega-computer scanned the rocket initiated 60 second launch . Quickly he ran down the stairs, on to the monrail, to the rocket building, up the elevator and into the rocket just in time for the last 5 seconds 5,4,3,2,1, blast off! They were pulled back in their seats as it flew into orbit. A few hours later, they could see a high-tech space station in sight, Sam pressed the dettachment button. The rocket fell down to Earth with only the cockpit left. They approached the space station and it parked into a room They jumped but there was no gravity so it was a hard job getting out. Sam pressed the dump button and the cockpit fell out . He opened a door and floated into the space station, there was a rocket/space jet that would take him to the moon but it only had 2 seats in it so one guy said "I'll stay here" and before you could say renegades, the other guy was in. Sam floated to the cockpit and renegades( the space jet's name) blasted off. A couple of hours later, Sam put his space suit back on just in case. They landed with a bump and the doors swung open, Sam's dream came true! Without hesitation, he jumped out of the space jet and stepped on the moon there was loads of footprints with a sign on them he recongised 2 of them as they said NEIL ARMSTRONG and BUZZ ALDRIN on them. H equipped himself with a sign made a footprint and placed the sign it read SAM DORL he stepped away and jumped, it was like jumping so high. The other guy was waiting in the space buggy as he jumped in they drove to a moonbase. He excitedly approached the door, it took a minute to open, but inside there was beds and TV. Even a biscuit tin that said property of Neil Armstrong do not steal. the other person said "this is junk, lets get out of here. Soon they were back at renegades then back at the space station and the person who stayed located an escape pod it was a 3 seater they all jumped in Sam pressed the drop button and thhey all dropped bach to Earth.
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milo
11/21/2019 04:50:14 pm
Today was the worst day ever, I was at school looking forward to eating my marvellous lunch. However when I took a bite I was expecting delicious marmite but it had horrible jam inside. I was absolutely furious I knew my mum would do this she must have put my marmite sandwich in her lunch box and hers in mine because I had her apple salad and pasta because I usually have crisps and Kitkat bar. When I got home she said I thought you loved jam but no I replied I like marmite .
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