We have a puzzle for you this week! A bit of a mystery. The prompt is:
… when it just wouldn’t take off … Things to consider:
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Charlie
10/2/2019 04:03:22 pm
Out at the launching station at D.C Washington,USA. Charlie was ready to get launched to the moon. He has been waiting a long time for this moment. A few hours later, Charlie was in the rocket. He was sweating everywhere as they started the countdown 5,4,3,2,10, blast off!! Charlie closed his eyes ready for impact but when it just wouldn't take off... He opened his eyes he was scared stiff. Ground control were furious. Soon, it started with a shudder and started plummeting through the atmosphere then the rocket exploded and he died
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Mr. Tomkins
10/2/2019 07:21:47 pm
Nice work Charlie - think about more exciting endings next time. This one is now up on 100WC.net :-)
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mackenzie
10/2/2019 04:27:25 pm
Jack,who was a skilled diver, was out on a fishing trip. They goal was to try catch a swordfish, or two .It was noon and they still hadn't seen one at all - will they find one? Out of the corner of his eye, Jack spotted the long sharp sword slithering through the water next to his bait. Jack was filled with delight when he saw it. However every time he tried to reel it in, it would just move away from the bait and Jack couldn't afford to lose this fish. When it wouldn't take off Jack thought that this was his chance, but all of sudden the swordfish darted off into the sunset and the sadness showed upon his face.
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Mr. Tomkins
10/2/2019 07:24:19 pm
Well done Mackenzie - make sure you are consistent with your tenses when you check it next time.
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Indiah
10/2/2019 04:29:31 pm
One day Evie had a frog, named Charlie she had entred him into a long jump competition for frogs. Evie was confident Charlie would win because they had been practising for many months. Finally the day came to the competition Evie was worried and excited at the same time.The frogs were all lined up...Beeeeeepppp... the horn went evryone started cheering and the frogs took off but Evie just stared Charlie wouldnt go! And thats how Evie remembers it... when it just wouldnt take off!
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Mr. Tomkins
10/2/2019 07:27:34 pm
This is online now Indiah! Well done; try to paragraph your writing, if you can! :-)
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Indiah
10/2/2019 04:30:09 pm
I did 88 words
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Patricia
10/2/2019 06:04:03 pm
The island
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Mr. Tomkins
10/2/2019 07:30:42 pm
That writing scared me! Try to split your writing into paragraphs if you can.
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Ruby
10/2/2019 07:29:25 pm
It was my first holiday abroad! I was super excited. We were going to the Caribbean!
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Mr. Tomkins
10/2/2019 07:31:09 pm
All of these above are up on 100wc.net if you want to take a look! :-)
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Charlie
10/3/2019 04:04:45 pm
I did around about 95
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Poppy
10/3/2019 04:18:32 pm
On Thursday was Millies science project, she had been working on it for days with her friend Bell. It was a miniture rocket and every time they had tested it, it had worked. It was Wednesday evening so when she went to bed she had at slight tickle down her spine that felt like butterflies in her tummy. The next morning Millie jumped out of bed and had her breakfast cheerfull and ready for the day ahead her. At school everyone had their science projects in front of them Millie and Bell were number 4 so they had to get ready for their turn. It was their go and Millie pressed the button for it to take off, when it just wouldn't take off... great their science project didn't work.
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Mr. Tomkins
10/3/2019 08:02:16 pm
It's a shame it didn't work! See if you can find it on 100wc.net Poppy - it's now on there!
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Joe
10/3/2019 04:30:47 pm
Bob,who was a skilled rocket designer, made rockets in all shapes and sizes .However there was one rocket and it just wouldn’t take off.He tried and tried but what ever he did it just wouldn’t work.Until one magical day,he pressed down the button and it flew off like someone on a trampoline,and now the rocket was in space and suddenly the was a deafening bang coming from above his head .it was the rocket smashing into the moon and now he felt desolate that was ten hard that he put into that rocket so he teamed up with his friends to make another one .
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Mr. Tomkins
10/3/2019 08:05:59 pm
Good effort Joe - I got slightly confused at the end so have adjusted it slightly on the 100wc - see if you can see the changes.
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Adam
10/3/2019 05:14:33 pm
Adam was a brave astronaut.Every single person wanted a autograph with him .In a week Adam was going on a rocket and it was a really big rocket also he was going with Ben armstrong (Neil Arstrong's son) together Adam and Ben were a great pair . On the day of the launch the pair waved to their fans before they got in the rocket , when they were in 5...4...3...2...1...it did not go they tried again when it just wouldn't take of ! So they decided to quit and they were going to spain instead for a magic adventure !
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Mr. Tomkins
10/3/2019 08:08:01 pm
Space then Spain! That's a difference! I have posted it on the 100wc website...see if you can see it. Well done Adam.
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benl
10/3/2019 05:16:35 pm
Jimmy and his mum were going on holiday ,they decided to go to Spain. They put their suitcases on a belt and headed to passport control .Eventually they got on the plane ,but when it was turned on it didn't go.When it just wouldn't take of, they decided to wait for it to be fuelled up. After a few hours it started to move Jimmy and his mum were delighted. In Spain all the people there were really nice to them which made their holiday the best holiday ever. The day Jimmy went back to school his friends loved to hear of all of his adventures in Spain.
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Mr. Tomkins
10/3/2019 08:12:39 pm
Another Spanish adventure! Well done Ben - your coma use is accurate. See if you can find it on 100wc.net!
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Emily
10/4/2019 06:32:27 pm
One day, a girl, who was called Josie, was feeling lonely. She was an only child so at home she never had anyone to play with. Just at that moment an idea popped into her head.
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Mr. Tomkins
10/4/2019 09:08:52 pm
Well written Emily - hope you enjoyed writing it. I have put it up on 100wc.net!
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Emily
10/5/2019 02:34:26 pm
Sorry I have put two on here, I didnt mean to submit it yesterday.
Emily
10/5/2019 02:32:15 pm
One day a girl, who was called Josie, was feeling lonely. She was an only child so at home she never had anyone to play with. Just at that moment an idea popped into her head. "What if I built myself a robot to be my best friend?" she asked herself. So that's what she did. It took her three and a half weeks to make, she was exhausted but very excited! "Ok this it it, I'm finally going to have a best friend!" She thought to herself. So, just then she pressed the on button but that's when it just wouldn't take off...
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Mr. Tomkins
10/7/2019 04:36:44 pm
Thanks Emily. Was it a flying robot? Well done for getting it up on the blog! :-)
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Liliah
10/6/2019 10:37:39 am
The chic
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Mr. Tomkins
10/7/2019 04:38:06 pm
A nice little story here Liliah. I like the idea of a fully-flying chicken!
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Oscar
10/6/2019 01:22:56 pm
Bob, the little boy who loved rockets, was sat in his car board rocketship imagining that he was in space. All of a sudden he had an idea, he was going to build a real rocketship! He went to his garage to grab an old washing machine. Then he realised it was too heavy to carry it outside. After that he found a metal tube and some tape. He stuck the tube to the back of the washing machine And got in. When it wouldn’t just take off Bob was furious
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Mr. Tomkins
10/7/2019 04:38:51 pm
After all that hard work! Well written Oscar! I wish it did take off!
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Flora
10/6/2019 02:44:09 pm
The other day, I was messing around with some glue and I accidentally got some on my finger. I touched my mum’s special vase and realised now I was stuck to it. Looking back now - when it just wouldn’t take off, I got sweaty and worried which wasn’t necessary because It turned out that that was a fake vase as she was expecting me to do something to it. But I was embarrassed all the same.
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Mr. Tomkins
10/7/2019 04:39:58 pm
I like the way you've taken a different take on the task Flora - well done :-)
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Aiden
10/6/2019 06:19:21 pm
All day I have not been able to stop thinking about how cool it would be to have an electric scooter. I asked my dad if he could take me to a scrap yard to see if there was any in there . We arrived at the scrap yard and found one that I really liked the look of ,but when it just wouldn’t take off we knew it would need fixing. We payed for the scooter and then took it home in my dads new car . My dad checked over the scooter and we needed to get a new battery and a belt to fix it . The parts came and my dad replaced them and I was able to ride it . “This is the coolest thing ever !”.
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Mr. Tomkins
10/7/2019 04:41:09 pm
That is indeed rather cool! Well done Aiden.
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Emma
10/7/2019 06:32:10 pm
Have you got my story I sent it on Saturday
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Joshua Dodd
10/13/2019 09:21:22 am
where is mine?
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